2021年3月21日托福独立写作真题范文 |关于看电影
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本期栏目作者:章跃
1 2021年3月21日托福独立写作题目
【考场题目回忆】:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies should only be watched when they teach people things about real life.
2 2021年3月21日托福独立写作解析
【命题立意分析】:
很可能是因为春节档的中国电影才逐步下线,讨论和影评的预热尚存时,ETS出了这样一道为时不晚的题目。毕竟贺岁档的电影还真的引发了大家对于看电影为故事为思考还是为娱乐为乐呵的热议。
【Introduction】
The statement is hardly convincing as it narrows the movies to an edification tool. Movies actually have more than one purpose, and viewers can go to the cinema not for the purpose of learning a lesson.
【写作思路】:
“不同意”可能是个很容易想到的立场,也是一个比较好阐述的立场,毕竟作为尘世凡夫俗子的笔者觉得,看电影不要那么沉重应该是更大一部分人的想法,那就比较容易找到理由去论述。
【Body】
We may have seen many movies that tell stories with messages, we also have seen movies with only sensational pictures that give aesthetic inspirations and movies that are primarily to give viewers hearty laughter. The visual effects or punchlines are also the meaningful purpose of movies; they are not inferior to instructive stories. For example, 此处可以举例说明了,尤其可以说说视效大片阿凡达(Avatar)或者开心麻花的各种搞笑片。
【本段解析】
最容易想到的理由立刻就写了,例子也很好举。写这一段不费事。
In addition, many people do not like to be instructed to live a “correct” life. A movie can be a philosophical book as is the idea of the screenplay; at the same time, such a movie may have a slack box office. A movie can also be a purely entertaining one and sell well. If the statement were right, should we reproach the audience for being unserious about life because of their choice of an amusing movie? Would the audience accept that? 这一段可以不举例,就在这两个问句结束就很足够有力了。多言或是赘述。
【本段解析】
这一段故意篇幅短小,也不举例。态度强硬一些,语句措辞本身有力一些,只要理由本身正确就可以“得理不饶人”。
Another major limitation of the statement is that it fails to see an important real motive for watching a movie that teaches something about real life. Typically, that a movie stars an adored actor may be the initial reason why people watch the movie. For example, 此处可以举例,比如是不是有人是冲着四字弟弟去看的《送你一朵小红花》然后被故事感动?是不是有人冲着贾玲去看的《你好,李焕英》而后被故事感动?Since we cannot deny this decisive factor and meanwhile we still want people to learn life lessons from the movie, we should not be too blunt about our intention of giving life advice. Nor should we tell people, using a teacher’s attitude, that they should watch only this and not that. Instead, we should be strategic, allowing the crowd to be “superficial” and using the star as the hook.
【本段解析】
笔者显然希望把这一段的论述展开,因为这个理由虽然证明了自己“不同意”的立场,也两边都不得罪人。
【Conclusion】
The statement is therefore unconvincing. In fact, it may be biased, self-righteous, and wrong.
【本段解析】
一句话的结尾足够,主要靠形容词对题目中的statement作出反面评价,这样以重申作者的“不同意”的态度。