2020年9月26日｜托福独立写作真题解析

9月26日托福独立写作

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Parents give their children (primary school students) weekly money to buy whatever they want. Some people think this can cause bad habits and ideas about money in children while others think the opposite. Which opinion do you agree with and why?

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本题属于经典的双主体对比题，因此在写作中需要注意对双方观点的涵盖以及对比论证不同手法的使用。

Pocket money has always been regarded by parents as a way to teach children the lesson about money management. As a result, many kids receive a bit of money every week to spend freely and they will be thebeneficiaries.【从句就点明立场的非常直接的开头】

First of all, the freedom in shopping decides the righteous concept of buying. Although some people may rebut that the younger children get in touch with money, the more worship towards money they would form, this is greatly demonize the weekly money. 【小让一步反驳】Even at a very young age, children still need to be entitled to free choices particularly in shopping. Once being satisfied at that moment, they will not haveextravagant hopes. We have witnessed so many cases in consistent with the fact. Many shopaholics originate from the upsetting incidents in childhood when their demands were refused or limited by parents’ excuse of money monster. They believe that even a little bit of money would spoil the kids dragging them to the hell of greed, which is ridiculous. Instead, children in this case often become out of control when holding money on their own.【非具体例子进行论证，同时搭配反向论证】

Also, weekly money ensures the rational money management. With finite money, if the kids are about to buy desired commodities, they will have to make a plan. It is always the case that cheaper products have no difficulty to realize, but for the other exceeding the budget, they must learn how todeposit the coins into the required number. During the process, their habit of saving can be fostered and some may even develop the thoughts to increase the weekly money.【说理的部分进行一个递进】 For example, my younger brother, only 10 years old, has been given 1 dollar every week since he was only 5. Aiming to buy his favorite model plane about 500 dollars, he has already saved the money up to 250 dollars. In order to meet the price as soon as possible, he makes a deal with my uncle that the prize he gets in school competition could be transferred to a bonus around 10 dollars. Finally, not only does he earn enough money for the model, but also progresses in academic learning as well as the ability in managing money.【给出例子说明道理】For young kids who are in formative period, suchcapability is extremely essential and the accompanying effect may last for long. When he grows up, he shows great talent in earning money and planning finance seems a piece of cake for him, compared with his contemporaries who are still green hand in that field.【同一个例子对应说理进行递进】

At this point, it is reasonable for some to query the meaning of weekly money to kids. However, I believe the impact is definitely positive as mentioned.【结尾点到即止】