【】雅思写作范文及解析:老城市会产生哪些新问题,如何解决?

发布时间:2016-11-09 16:40

本期的机经回忆查看,请:11月3日雅思机经回忆及解析11月03日雅思写作大作文考了这一题:老城市会产生哪些新问题,如何解决?具体题目如下:

 

题目:Many towns and cities constructed in previous centuries are suitable for life at that time, and cause many problems today. Describe the problems it may cause and give the possible solution.

雅思写作范文及解析:老城市会产生哪些新问题,如何解决?

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Many cities and towns built a few hundred years ago have become obsolete now, no matter how brilliant they used to be, for they are no longer suitable for life today.

 

【解析】:(1) 本段按照题目要求,简单描写现象。(2) 注意唐老师这里对原文的改写。原文:Many cities and towns constructed in previous centuries... 改写:many cities and towns built a few hundred years ago...(3) “数个世纪之前修建的城镇”是本文关键词,唐老师有如下不同表达:cities and towns built a few hundred years ago; cities and towns constructed a few centuries ago; cities and towns built a long time ago; the century-old cities and towns(4) obsolete adj. 过时的;不再使用的

 

In my view, these cities and towns may cause three kinds of problems. At the most basic level, they can no longer provide satisfactory conditions for our modern existence. A bit more than 100 years ago, people did not use buses or cars, so the city did not have broad streets; people did not travel by train or airplane, so the city was not equipped with any railway station or airport; most people shopped in the stores near their homes, so the city did not have to own shopping malls or supermarkets. As more and more people rush into urban areas, the city has expanded with the population, and modern urban people would find themselves unable to survive without the broad streets, the train, the airplane and the supermarket. Meanwhile, cities and towns built centuries ago do not have enough entertainment and sports facilities available to contemporary city dwellers who, relieved of the manual labor by the technological advances, suddenly find they have a great amount of free time. For example, these cities and towns are not likely to have 3-D or IMAX movie theaters for movie fans, or huge stadiums for sports fans. Consequently, people may find their life in such cities and towns are most boring and tedious. Finally, the cities and towns constructed long time ago cannot possibly have anticipated the negative effects of environmental issues brought over by our modern life, so they usually have residence area, industrial area and business area all mixed up without separating them. This is, of course, unbearable to our urban life style today.

【解析】:(1) 本段讨论老城镇给现代生活带来的问题。句为主题句,提出本段的核心内容。(2) 在讨论这三个问题的时候,有两个地方值得大家学习模仿。首先,唐老师没有使用firstly...secondly...finally 这样的套路(当然,这样写也不能算错,只是显得单调),而是使用了 “at the most basic level”(在最基础的层面上), “meanwhile”(同时), “finally”(最后)。其二,唐老师在讨论这三个问题时,遵循的是由浅入深,由具体到抽象的逻辑顺序:先讨论老城镇给我们的衣食住行带来的问题,接着讨论给我们健康娱乐带来的问题,最后讨论给我们的社会环境带来的问题,这样行文就会显得更具连贯性。雅思写作要得高分,需要全面考虑语言质量和逻辑连贯,二者缺一不可。同学们平时应该对此多加练习,改变想到哪写到哪的坏习惯。(3) at the most basic level 在最基础的层面上(4) existence n. 生存;存在(5) expand v. 扩张(6) survive v. 生存(7) facilities 设施 sports facilities 体育设施(8) city dwellers 城市居民。本文“城市居民”这个词需要反复出现,唐老师用了多种替换表达:people living in cities and towns; city people; urban population; urban people 等。(9) relieve sb. of... 使某人从......解脱出来(10) consequently 结果 (=as a result)(11) anticipate v. 预料,期待 (=expect)

 

While the century-old cities and towns may carry much cultural and historical value, they must be re-constructed in the interest of people living in them today. The cityinfrastructure must be reshaped and include such facilities as shopping centers, sports stadiums, wide streets and pavements and provide services like metro, train, and airplane. And to minimize the unfavorable effects of modern life on urban populace, the cities and towns should be set the areas apart by their respective functions.

【解析】:(1) 本段针对前面的问题提出解决办法。(2) carry 携带,此处如果用have,就显得过于普通了。(3) in the interest of... 符合......的利益(4) infrastructure 基础设施(5) minimize 使......最小化(6) unfavorable 不利的;不适合的(7) populace 人口(8) respective 各自的 

 

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