2020年7月18日托福独立写作真题范文 | 差评可等……

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7月18日(1/2)托福独立写作

这题又考?!

7月18日重现2019年12月1日题!

    题目是:    

When we give feedback about work of our classmates orcoworkers, which one of the following should we givefirst?

- the positive feedback;

- the negative feedback.

    Introdution   

Commonly, positive feedback is more acceptable when we comment on our peers’ work. Meanwhile, we do not make only favorable comments, and, where necessary, are not unlikely to give unfavorable feedback. However, things are not that simple, and there is a conundrum.

解读：    

.篇幅短小;内容进展的节奏快。

.居然没有在开头段落里明确立场?

· 对的,这一篇是这么个开头技法。

    body para1   

We may point out the limitations first because this may be efficient communication. There is no beating around the bush, and although this may be upsetting, there is always a chance for the compensation as the positive feedback will be given after. Unfortunately, many of my coworkers, when they are not recognized for the merits of their performance in the first place, respond unfavorably to the criticism about their work. In such situations, they cannot wait patiently for the praise we think we can give later to reverse their mood, and may be too crushed to listen. The lesson is that we should go the other way around. As a matter of fact, this is not only to avoid the “devastating” embarrassment but also to avoid the possible resistance to the criticism.

解读：

·先让步，再转折;讨论有理有例才有力。

·措辞的细节处讲究不少。

    body para2   

There are also instances in which critical feedback should be given before acclaim. If a job is indeed poorly done, we are advised to be blunt and to cut to the chase quickly, for the consideration that our kind gesture, that we give a compliment first, may be misinterpreted as the whole idea of the evaluation, and for another consideration that the gesture may be seen as a fake display of our true thoughts and thus may be more embarrassing and hurting than the straightforward criticism.

解读：

故意让篇幅与上一个主体段有区别，避免主体部分的笔墨平均分配，节奏单一。

·措辞的细节处尤其注意那个超级长句。

    body para3   

行文至此，题目中给出两个选择势均力敌，处在平衡状态。这时候，我们再写一个段落给我们心里的那个选项加码，就把我们的立场明确了。比如，我会讨论：Saying something nice about our peers’ performance is to open their hearts and prepare their emotions for the criticism.  具体的展开，大家自己试试？

conclusion

At this point, we have found the way out of the dilemma. 

解读：

·浮光掠影。

·一语定论。